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Hello i am Hun Ho Kang from Gimcheon high school. while learning about the controversial issue between Japan and Korea , i get to see your article at national geographic  and it was well organized and helpful to me but while reading the article i found some errors in your articles that needs your consideration  



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first, the phrase 'Dokdo Island' should be just Dokdo Dokdo's 'do' means 'island 'in korean so the meaning is overlapped and it might give some confusion to readers so i hope you might consider changing it 
second, you used 'sea of japan' instead of 'east sea' this is also another controversial issue between Japan and Korea actually, Korea takes control of that area right now but due to Japan's arguement there's some conflict between two countries so would you mind changing 'sea of japan' to 'east sea' or could you at least change it to 'sea of japan/east sea'?



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there might be some error in my sentences since i'm not that good at English. but i hope you understand my opinion and consider correcting the errors 

i look forward to hearing from you 

yours sincerely, 
Hun Ho Kang  


 
   
 

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